REVISION: Repeal of the Helmet Law

Local physicians held a press conference on Monday morning to discuss the state’s consideration of a bill that will repeal the helmet law, which says that motorcyclists must wear helmets.

A motorcyclist is injured in a two-vehicle accident while the press conference was taking place.

About 50 Towson doctors, along with over 100 nurses, paramedics and other health care workers attended a press conference on the front lawn of Memorial Hospital. Doctors from Johns Hopkins University Hospital , Mercy Hospital and Greater Baltimore Medical Center also attended.

The Maryland State Legislature is considering a bill that would change the state law requiring motorcyclists to wear helmets and many Towson physicians are not happy about that. As a result, they have unveiled a petition to legislators asking them not to pass the bill. So far, they have nearly 400 signatures and hope to have at least 500 by the time they sent it to the Legislature next Monday

Statistics show that the helmet law is doing its job. It also shows what will happen if the Legislature repeals it.

“The number of serious head injuries caused by motorcycle accidents in Maryland is over 70 percent less now then when the helmet law was adopted 25 years ago,” Dr. Karl Sodergreen said. “Reduction is directly related to passage of that law.”

“A study from last year about health-care costs related to motorcycle riding by the state medical society showed that emergency room costs alone could go up by more than 45 percent if the helmet law is repeal,” Dr. Hector Rivera said.

The bill will be considered by the Legislature next Wednesday.

As the press conference was going on, two ambulances raced into Memorial Hospital’s parking lot with victims from a two-vehicle accident. Ironically, one of the victims, 19-year-old Grady Smith, was driving a motorcycle.

Due to the accident, Smith suffered a broken arm and several broken ribs. Smith’s doctor says that his injuries may have been worse if he had not been wearing a helmet.

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Proofreading:

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Repeal of the Helmet Law

Local physicians hold a press conference on Monday morning to discuss the state’s consideration of a bill that will repeal the helmet law.

A motorcyclist is injured in a two-vehicle accident while the press conference was taking place.

About 50 Towson doctors, along with over 100 nurses, paramedics, and other health care workers attended a press conference on the front lawn of Memorial Hospital. Doctors from Johns Hopkins University Hospital , Mercy Hospital and Greater Baltimore Medical Center also attended.

The Maryland State Legislature is considering a bill that would change the state law requiring motorcyclists to wear helmets and many Towson physicians are not happy about that. As a result, they have unveiled a petition to legislators asking them not to pass the bill. So far, they have nearly 400 signatures and hope to have at least 500 by the time they sent it to the Legislature next Monday

“The number of serious head injuries caused by motorcycle accidents in Maryland is over 70 percent less now then when the helmet law was adopted 25 years ago,” Dr. Karl Sodergreen said. “Reduction is directly related to passage of that law.”

“A study from last year about health-care costs related to motorcycle riding by the state medical society showed that emergency room costs alone could go up by more than 45 percent if the helmet law is repeal,” Dr. Hector Rivera said.

The bill will be considered by the Legislature next Wednesday.

As the press conference was going on, two ambulances raced into Memorial Hospital’s parking lot with victims from a two-vehicle accident. Ironically, one of the victims, 19-year-old Grady Smith, was driving a motorcycle.

Because of the accident, Smith suffers a broken arm and several broken ribs. Smith’s doctor says that his injuries may have been worse if he had not been wearing a helmet.

Good Ledes

I really enjoyed reading Noelle and Jeannie's ledes. I liked Noelle's lede because it was very specific. I also liked her word choices. If I read this lede in a news story, I would immediately be hooked. I also like it because I think that she is taking an interesting take on the issue of credit card debt.

I liked Jeannie's lede because it was optimistic. When I saw the word "wise" I was hooked. I can tell that she put a lot of thought into it.

After reading these ledes, there are a few things I would do to mine. I would be a little more specific in my lede. I would also pick better word choices in order to grab the reader's attention.

News Lede

Here is a rough draft of my news lede:

College students struggle to pay off credit card debt that they accumulated even after graduation.

For this news story, I think that students and counselors who have dealt with student credit card debt will be good sources. The only one I could get in contact with at the moment is my cousin Jillian Jones in Georgia.

My cousin is a 26 year-old college student getting her Master's Degree. She has three credit cards with a debt of about $8,000. When she told me that, I was shocked. Most of the articles I looked at said students have about $3,000 in debt. She told me that most people look at her $8,000 and don't think that it is a big deal because they are more in debt that she is.

Like most students, she charged things on credit cards with the mindset that you can pay it back later. She says that paying off the bad hasn't been too bad, but it just seems like it is going to take forever to pay it off. She told me about a guy named Dave Ramsey. He has books out that can help people in debt. She is currently reading this book to help her out.

After listening to what she had to say, I think I want to focus on how students who have debt are dealing with it. When I say that, I mean what steps they are taking to try to pay it off. I want to focus on that because we all know that students have debt, but we don't necessarily know how they are dealing with it.

Credit Card Debt Among College Students

According to Financial Traps for College Students, the average credit card debt owed by college students is about $2,700. About 10 percent of college students owe more than $7,000. Part of the reason for this could be the fact that most students hold an average of three separate credit cards. I don't see any reason why a college student would need three credit cards. In my opinion, you only need two credit cards. One of them should be your bank card so you are only spending money that you actually have. The second should be a major credit card that's only used in case of emergencies.

Learning to be in Debt 101 says that credit cards are easy to get. For this reason. students are getting and using them more than ever. In a study done by Norma Mendoza, students with a future orientation tend to use their credit cards more. They may spend the money now thinking that they will be able to pay it off in the future because they will be earning more money. That's not a bad way of thinking, but you need to be realistic.

I think that the issue of credit card debt among college students is something that needs to be taken seriously. There is no reason why we should be 25 or 30 years old still paying off debts that we made in college, especially if it isn't a loan. We need to be more aware of how we use our credit cards. If you have cash or a bank card, use that. Don't be so quick to charge something just because you have a credit card.

Journalism 2.0

In my opinion, Celebritology exemplifies good blogging. This blog is done by Liz Kelly as apart of The Washington Post. I think this is an example of good blogging because it uses some of the mechanics that were described in Journalism 2.0. One of the mechanics of a blog that it listed was: Link, summarize, analyze. I feel that this blog did just that. The author gave you a sentence or two about what was going on with a specific celebrity. Using a few words from the sentence, the author links to the article where more information about the celebrity and their situation can be found. After linking and summarizing, the author would analyze the news story by giving their own opinions about the situation. Journalism 2.0 also says that a good blog is an ongoing conversation. The author analyzes the situation as they see it which in turns gives readers the opportunity to respond like you would in a face to face conversation. Photos and videos also make this a good blog. Photos are good because they let your reader see who it is that you are talking. Blogging is really different from other types of newswriting. In print, you don't always have the luxury of giving your own opinion on a subject. Your main job is using facts to create a news story. With blogging, you're free to write about whatever you want. Print isn't always open for commenting, while blogging is. I feel that print has more of a "these are the facts how I see them, deal with it" attitude while blogging is more about gossiping and ranting, so readers have the opportunity to share their opinions. In the blog that the author did about Marie Osmond's comeback is an example of how blogging is different from newswriting. In print, the story would have just been about how Marie Osmond is going to be having a new daytime talk show. With blogging, the author was able to inject her own opinions about the situation.

From time to time, I might write a blog. I have a MySpace page and that's one of the things that you can do on there. I only write one when I'm extremely bored and I just get the sudden urge to write one which isn't often. I like to read my cousin's blog on MySpace because it's funny. She likes to use something that happened to her that day and turn in into a blog. When i read it, I laugh because it's so funny because she is a very sarcastic person like I am. Entertainment blogs appeal to me. I like to read the print version of an article about a particular celebrity and then see what bloggers have to say about it. Journalists and public relations professionals could use to blogs to give readers more information about things that they may not have been able to put in the print version. They can also use it to give readers instant information. With a blog, all you have to do is type something up. Newspapers have to be printed which takes time and readers may want to know what's going on right then and there.